Persuasive+Writing

Persuasive writing is about convincing people and arguing with some. This is what we have been learning. This is my first piece of persuasive writing. **__ George is not a tank __ George has evoked an argument that he is a tank and you can probably see already I will easily disagree with this.

George may think he is a tank just because he’s a bit bigger then some of the kids that aren’t so tank. Compared to others he is no where near the tank that he thinks he is and he is just way out of his mind. George is fairly big but he’s just a normal kid with a bit of abs. There are some people that are tanks but he would never be one of them.

I say he isn’t a tank and if anyone disagrees with me open your eyes and look properly at what you think is a tank. So everyone change your minds and think twice, I mean he isn’t even that big **

**So see you later everyone and thanks for listening and I hope you all will take in what I have just said. See You.**__

 Dear Mum and dad My class is going on a ski trip and I happen to wonder if you, my mother and you, my father will let me go. The reason I would like to go is because it will be a good experience and i will learn lots and i will become a more responsible person. Just imagine me playing in the snow and growing up to be a mature self managing kid. Can you just imagine playing in the snow with your friends and having the chance to actually feel that snow hit your face and be refreshed by that lovely graffiti soft snow? On this trip room 17 will be planning it. In this opportunity we have been trusted to plan our own ski trip which on that trip we will be doing a variety of fun activities. The skills be will be using on this trip are self management, Relating to others and being responsible as well as respecting others. We will also be challenging ourselves and communicating with others effectively and at the same time we will be earning others respect and trust. We are also learning to be open to new ideas and taking in new learning opportunities. Your choice involves our future so if you will, please let us go on this outgoing, exciting experience. Your sincerely Jerram
 * Ski Trip Letter** __



Goals:  1. I need to work on my paragraphs  2. Back up my ideas better  3.  Use emotive language to appeal to the audience

Parents comment:

I particularly like the ski trip scenario - it has good content and explains to me good reasons why the trip is of value to Jerram. georges scenario sounds a little forceful rather than being persuasive - being persuasive should be about influencing and not authoritive.

**__Why New Zealand Should Spend More Money On The Army __** <span style="FONT-SIZE: 13pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU"> **<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">My personal opinion is that N.Z should spend more money on our army. What if one day suddenly we get all these bombs dropping on our country what would we do then, nothing all we could do is just be like sheep in a slaughter house. So have a look at what I have to say. On the other hand if we put more money into our army we could be prepared for battle and fight back with a descent force including better air force better weapons and better vehicles. ** <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU"> **<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">AT the moment we NEED a better force which means a better future for our country. We at the moment have no chance against the countries that attack other countries. Just think back into WW2 what happened, ill tell you what happened our army went to hungry with not a very good force and we went unprepared and as soon as we got to the top of the hill we got killed. But like I said before just imagine if we did have a descent army we would have had helicopters and tanks and more, then maybe our people would have made a good war and perhaps come out on top. Do you know why America is so good and strong in there army, it is because they spend so much on their army and that’s what we should do. On the other hand we New Zealand do not use our money which means we won’t have the weapons they do. Has anyone seen that program future weapons? Well guess what country that’s in, America. In New Zealand just think if we had those kinds of weapons, wouldn’t that be great. What if we had a better air force we could do so much better in our wars. What if the world had a World War 3 and N.Z happened to be involved, we would to so much better and N.Z would be so proud and we would be so peaceful knowing that we’ve been saved. ** <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU"> **<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">What I think as a person from New Zealand is that I’ve had enough of this war happening and I would hate for us to have a world war 3 because that means more violence for new Zealand. But if we invested a bit more in our army and spent a bit more money we would have a safer future and it would be much more safer for our generation of our toddlers and when they are older they wont have to go away for war and risk their lives. ** <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU"> **<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">I know that N.Z is a small country but wouldn’t it be nice if we had a much more better army for once. Even if there isn’t another war at least were prepared. So come on New Zealand let’s give it a go and be a more stronger and let’s be a bigger country for once. Let’s go New Zealand and lets be a better country, lets be safer and most of all lets be proud to be able to fight back. ** <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU"> **<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">So lets just think about all the things we could do better and what a more relaxing country we would become all because if we spent some money on an army. So New Zealand, its time we gave it a go. ** <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU"> **<span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">Thanks for listening and just think about what a big difference to our future it would make. Bye ** **
 * <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-bidi-font-size: 14.0pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-AU">From Jerram

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